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Hello again, Doni! Introduction - We are living on different planets. Having lived in many countries around the world, I can guarantee that a healthy diet is not the main concern of people. That factor is money, money, and money. Guaranteed. Chinese people put up with terrible pollution simply becau...

Hi Michael, Introduction - Heated debate? Where? The rest of the essay is quite good. The arguments could be developed more - what you say is very general. For example, in the last sentence of the second main paragraph, you make a good point but fail to expand on why this could be good or could caus...

Hi Owais! Oh, the noisy dog question - love it! :lol: Great letter with nice vocab and grammar. Very few mistakes, such as ... 1. change kid's to kids' 2. delete the 'Lack of sound sleep' sentence as meaning is already clear 3. new sentence - Therefore I reckon ... and change reckon as it is too inf...

Hi Fasah, Introduction - good First main paragraph - Critical mental health? Notorious attitude? Forces? I think that the basic argument is good, but be careful with vocabulary. Second main paragraph - How is the Karachi incident a sigh of class problems? The fact that the victims were wealthy does ...

Hi Wayfarer!
Great essay! Nice range of grammar and vocab, with few mistakes. Well done,
David

Hello! Introduction - good First main paragraph - The first sentence is an assertion which is absolutely untrue. The economic motivation, in China for example, to cheat foreign tourists, creates many conflicts. Your third sentence supports this. The last sentence is false. It is extremely unlikely t...

Hi Sundas, Introduction - Why is education a precursor to success? Why do children need to be trained? Teachers can only teach? Children have to struggle? Why can understanding only be achieved through extra work? Why is home work vital in career growth? First main paragraph - So, the timetable crea...

Hi Fasah, Introduction - Too long. What do you mean by 'potentially'? How have regulation authorities made sport profitable? Why is it 'believed' that sport can make people a lot of money? That's a fact, not a belief. Complete analysis? In a 300 word essay? First main paragraph - What's a 'stereotyp...

Yeah ... If details are only provided to paying clients, then someone from the British Council could easily pay and then find out how you do it ... assuming this isn't a SCAM!!!

Hi Michael, Generally, I think this is a good essay. Just a few points ... 1. I cannot agree FOR the following reasons 2. It is generally believed that children are immature - Maybe, but is that correct? 3. Why is academic study more important? Grammar is good (range and accuracy) and vocab is good ...

Hi dnz,
Very good essay! The only thing I would like to see is two or three specific examples to illustrate your points. vocabulary and grammar (range and accuracy) are very good!
All the best,
David

Hi!
Generally good - just a few points.
1. I think the pier is on the southern side
2. spelling - residents, circle, scattered, restaurant, eastern, northern,
3. the beach is not 'far' from anywhere on the island
Good vocabulary and grammar is reasonable.
All the best,
David

Hi Asri! Generally, this is a good essay, but I think that you should include some specific examples of what the controversy is about. You do mention a few things briefly, but without details. Vocabulary is good and grammar is too, with not many mistakes and a good range of structures. All the best,...

Hi Hollanda,
Basically, a very good essay. I would add a few examples of jobs that young people might find beneficial when taking a gap year.
Very good vocabulary and good grammar with few mistakes.
David

Hi! Generally, this is a good essay. 1. I think that you focus too much on the example. 2. Delete the last sentence of the introduction. 3. I'm not sure about the "up close personal" aspect of concerts. In my experience, the singer/group is quite far from most of the audience. Anyway, very...

Hi!
This is a REALLY good answer - very few mistakes and meaning is clear throughout. Change 'eliminated' to 'removed'.
All the best,
David

Hi Michael, This is a very good essay - well done! There are relatively few grammar mistakes and none of them interferes with meaning. You have used a wide variety of vocabulary with few mistakes (e.g. boots - boosts). If you feel that you are going to be short of time, make sure that you only inclu...

Yes, they are just a few suggestions for improved language.
D

No great wisdom involved, I assure you!
I would suggest rewriting the essay to see how you improve.
All the best,
David

Hi Shappy, I don't think that you have entirely answered the question. Many people (not me!) would argue that because women are out working, their children are free to be influenced by films and friends. If you disagree, you could try to explain why those people are wrong. 1. The evidence that youth...

Hi Fasah, Good report! There are just a few mistakes that I'd like to point out. 1. The chart doesn't show the NUMBER of people with computers - it shows the percentage of people who have them. 2. The second piece of information - The second chart 3. with bachelors - with bachelors degrees 4. the co...

Hi Sanket, Good letter! You have answered all the key points and provided some development for each. Only a solution to the barking is not mentioned, but it is clearly suggested that the neighbor find one. Grammar and vocab are generally good and sometimes very good, e.g. Lack of sleep is hampering ...

Hi Sanket, The first thing I notice is that you have focused relatively little on reducing the problems. Also, you seem convinced that wearing glasses is purely a result of playing computer games, which is unlikely. Otherwise, the essay is quite good, with good vocabulary. Though grammar mistakes ar...

Hi Asadurk! In the first paragraph, you have generalised quite a lot. You assume that children will do their homework before playing games, for instance. In the second paragraph, you mention lack of physical activity, which doesn't quite fit with your example of watching TV. However, overall, you ha...

Spelling only covers a small part of the criteria and is very unlikely to prevent you from getting 6/6.5. Most candidates need to ... 1. answer the question, not the topic 2. use clear vocabulary rather than throwing in higher level vocab that is incorrectly used 3. use a variety of grammar structur...