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No, it will not affect your score in any way.
Best of luck with your test!
David

Hi Plin! I like this essay! I think that you have made some very good points and used a wide variety of vocabulary and grammatical structures with few mistakes that do not interfere with meaning. I think that you could develop some points a little more, perhaps by being more specific. Alternatively ...

Hi Prinks!

This essay is much better! Lots of good vocabulary is used correctly and there is a good variety of simple and complex structures. The essay is well-organised and it is easy to follow the clear arguments.

Well done!
David

Hi Hollanda, Introduction - Are you sure about the first sentence? First main paragraph - Very good! Second main paragraph - I'm not sure about these arguments. Creativity? As for the question of time, what if children get food from a school canteen? Conclusion - The main problem is that you haven't...

Hi again, Prinks! Introduction - Whoops! The question doesn't mention fast food! Is a disaster coming? :shock: Or did you miss out the word 'fast' from the question? ;) First main paragraph - Good, even though fast food is a main focus. Second main paragraph - Yes, there it is! :o You've also put fa...

Hi!
I am fully familiar with the test. Message me to let me know what you need. The A1 test is very low level, so I doubt that you need to worry too much. As long as you can communicate in basic, everyday situations, you'll be fine.
Looking forward to hearing from you,
David

Hello! Basically, a good essay. I suggest developing the ideas a little by giving more detailed examples, e.g. why might demand for literature grads increase. I also recommend that you consider how studying one field can help with another field. Finally, try to use more modal verbs. In this essay, y...

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Hi Prinks! As I said, try to think of how poor people getting healthier benefits richer people - it does and in many ways! 1. business, employees, customers 2. disease doesn't respect wealth - rich people can die of (e.g.) cholera too! 3. creation of a better society (e.g. Zuckerberg, Gates) Pretty ...

Hello! You raise a good point when you ask about generating ideas. I can suggest 2 things. First, read more widely. There are plenty of sources of information on the internet on practically any topic. If you are in a class, read other students' essays and swap ideas. Secondly, talk to a variety of p...

Hi! Great idea to boost the post! :lol: Introduction - It is useful ... but ... not always ... A little confusing. First main paragraph - The second half of the second sentence is confusing. It might be good to reduce the sentence length. The third sentence is interesting. Do you mean that all socia...

Hello again! Good questions! Let's take a look at the last sentence of the intro and the first of the next paragraph - "In my opinion, punishment is not helpful in guiding these children. While educating the young ones, sometimes, punishment is required ..." First you are giving your opini...

Hi Prinks! Generally, this is very good, but be careful (again!) with language. Look at the last sentence of your second main paragraph and the first sentence of your conclusion. I'm confused! In the second main paragraph, why might wealthy people benefit from paying for poor people to have access t...

Hello! The introduction is longer than the individual main paragraphs! Cut it down. Basically, your essay is good, with the main points clear and with good use of grammar and vocabulary. I think a little more detail on why individual countries cannot deal with these issues would be useful. All the b...

Hello! Basically, this is a good essay. I think that to improve it, you should include energy (electricity) generation and discuss alternative forms of energy that do not cause so much pollution. Alternatively / Additionally, you could consider the rising global population and the fact that each per...

Hello! First main paragraph - Your main point is an assumption. You assume that ALL young people will benefit like this. Also the point could have a concrete example to make it clearer. Second main paragraph - The first sentence is unclear. What about criminals? Third main paragraph - Be careful wit...

Hello! Basically, this is a good report. Remember 'billion minutes' not 'billion of minutes'! The only real problem is with the conclusion. You claim that the increase in mobile call time affected the call time for the other categories. This is not shown by the data - only report the data, don't inf...

Hi Ecro,
This is a very good essay. I think that you have picked out the key arguments and provided some development.
Well done!
David

Hi Ecro,
I think that you could have added a few more details, such as the size of the island, but basically this is a good report. Vocab and grammar are very good.
David

Hi Jenny, Introduction - Not unreasonable AND wrong!? First main paragraph - Does construction work really involve physical strength, considering how much machinery we use nowadays? Do you mean men are not patient or careful? Second main paragraph - Really? Do people have the right to choose their j...

The first diagram is incorrectly labelled. Anyway, you have done a great job!
David

Hi! First main paragraph - Water is polluted FOR ... There are many factories constructed along ... Because a purification system is expensive, most ... Generally, a good essay, but I think that you need to develop the ideas more. Personally, I find that the 'lack of awareness' reason is weak. I mea...

Hi! First main paragraph - In the introduction you said punishment is not helpful. Then you say punishment is required. Now you say punishment is essential! I am totally confused! Second main paragraph - Stubbornness and refusal to listen are not 'miscommunication' (= bad communication). There is no...

Hello! Introduction - Good First main paragraph - Good, although I don't understand the last sentence. Don't want to take responsibility? What do you mean? Second main paragraph - "he WILL get no one to help"? Are you sure? Why? Depression and loneliness also afflict people who live with o...