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Hello again, Jenny! Introduction - It is argued ... by which people? Both ideas are viable, so analysing for viability is not really what needs to be done in the essay. First main paragraph - Good. Second main paragraph - Competitive? Funny display? Overall, good, but make sure that you use words co...

Hello again! Introduction - 'It is believed ...' Who by? Otherwise quite good. Grammar : 'I partly agree ...' First main paragraph - Good. 'It is believed that ...' Why is it only 'believed'? It's a fact, not an opinion! Second main paragraph - Good, but notice the large difference in size between t...

In that case, the main thing is to ensure your grammar is extremely good - even better than now!
Best of luck!
David

Hello Xianz!

Overall, a good essay. I think that you could have developed the points a little more though.

Well done!
David

Hello Truong!

Overall, a very good letter. A few corrections ...

1. sound was heard ...
2. was promptly sent to remedy
3. try not to begin sentences with 'and'
4. the door has started having problems again

Well done!
David

Hello Davide! Introduction - Good. 'It is agreed that' - who by? First main paragraph - The idea is interesting, but do you really think that all those people are going to the USA and Europe because the Western governments are encouraging them? Examples! Second main paragraph - True. There is also t...

Hello!

Basically, very good. The figures for Japanese tourists is not 'ever-increasing' because it falls from 1990 to 1991, as you noted later.

Well done!
David

The Cambridge books (past papers) are always useful. If you (or anyone else) sends me your email address, I can send you some materials for speaking and writing.
David

Hello again! Basically, a reasonable answer, but I think that you have focused too much on plastic bags and wrapping as examples, rather than looking at the issue from a more general view (consumerism) or looking at a broader range of examples, e.g. buying things and using them for shorter periods o...

Hello!

This is a very good essay with no major problems. Well done!

There's a good range of complex structures, often used correctly, and a range of vocab including some higher level items.

The question is rather easy (likely General Training, not Academic).

All the best,
David

Hi! To begin with, and to be absolutely clear, I don't know for sure what happened in your test. However, in part 3, examiners are supposed to 'push' candidates to their linguistic limits and asking more complex questions is a way of doing this. Some examiners do also speak faster, but personally I ...

Hello again, Hollanda! First main paragraph - Good, but remember that the lack of fossil fuels has been (incorrectly) predicted many times in the past and that these fuels are currently relatively cheap. Second main paragraph - Why should we use something that's more expensive (renewable energy)? Yo...

Hello again, Ecro! First main paragraph - I think you need to explain why the students will be organising the schedule and not the schools. Students are already part of the neighbourhood! Second main paragraph - Both these points need further explanation. How does the community service lead to a 'pa...

Hi Ecro!

Overall, not bad. One figure is wrong - 2 billions?

You went for the difficult option of describing all three lines together rather than describing them individually. This is acceptable but you have to make sure that the sentences are very well linked.

All the best,
David

Hello! First main paragraph - If it's compulsory, is it really learning to OFFER help? Will? Are you sure? The second and third main paragraphs are too short. Why would they just be sitting at home? Why wouldn't they be playing sport or doing homework? Rather a negative attitude! Overall, this is an...

Hello again! Introduction - Good, but change 'disagreed' to 'disagree'. First main paragraph - 1. 'not ONLY beneficial' (that mistake changes the meaning, so is considered a bad error!). 2. Representatives? Sales representatives? 3. 'it depends on the individual'. 4. 'enormous females' is completely...

Hello again, Max! Introduction - Very good, but not sure about the word 'relevant'. First main paragraph - Good, but you don't explain why that is due to GOVERNMENT spending and could not be achieved equally by private spending. Second main paragraph - Good, but people die from illnesses in all coun...

Hi Jenny!

Another very good letter!

All the best,
David

Hi Michelle! I'm going to jump on your first argument. It is a commonly made point, but does it really work? How many people do you know who think that McDonald's and sugar are healthier than fruit and vegetables? Actually, you make my point perfectly when you say that you can build new sports facil...

Hello! This is a good essay. Ideas are clear, but be a little careful with words like 'all'. Also, you only talk about renting, whilst many people buy their homes. Some grammar/vocab mistakes ... 1. It is disagreed - who by? 2. more likely to be able 3. and are less concerned with regard to 4. tenan...

Dear All, One of the best contributors to this forum, Hollanda, recently asked me how to get more (and better!) ideas for writing. Here's my reply ... Reading! Then do some more reading! Read widely. Read newspapers and magazines that challenge your viewpoint. Some TV programmes (and YouTube clips) ...

Reading! Then do some more reading! Read widely. Read newspapers and magazines that challenge your viewpoint. Some TV programmes (and YouTube clips) are also useful. Finally, don't forget to talk to other people, preferably from outside your usual social circle. You'll quickly discover that people w...

Hello again, Hollanda!

Overall, a good essay, but try to explain (develop) your ideas rather than jumping from point to point. For example, why is a mixed gender work environment better? Why should people aim for a fair society? Why is there improved productivity?

All the best,
David

In the conclusion, you must.
In the introduction you can.
David

Hello!

Good essay! The key to writing in a shorter time is to have your ideas ready, meaning that you need to have done a wide range of reading and preparation.

All the best,
David